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IELTS Band 7 Essay Samples


These are IELTS band 7 essay samples which were given grades (of seven or 7.5) and primary feedback on the rating for every standards by an skilled IELTS teacher. 


Subject: Migration to Cities (Band 7)

Younger persons are leaving their houses in rural areas to work or examine in cities. 

What are the explanations?

Do the benefits of this improvement outweigh the drawbacks?

The comparability of requirements of the cities and small city or villages has been at all times a debate. Lately, youngsters select to stay within the cities relatively than their house villages due to college or job alternatives. This essay will focus on a number of causes behind this pattern and clarify why the benefits of being in a metropolis do certainly outweigh its drawbacks.

There are a number of causes to want residing in city areas. Firstly, it provides folks a possibility to check in higher colleges which can’t be present in rural areas. Since within the fashionable world training means very a lot for folks’s future, it’s essential to have increased training levels for these people to search out well-paid jobs. Along with that, metropolis life supplies folks with utterly completely different experiences than their house villages. Because of the faculties, work or social gathering locations, they get to fulfill a higher variety of folks from throughout the nation in comparison with their rural cities which is essential for one’s private improvement. Lastly, within the cities, not solely they get greater variety of job choices, but additionally they will earn bigger sum of money. It is extremely effectively know that job market is considerably restricted within the villages additionally the present jobs barely pay sufficient.

It’s clearly seen that advantages of leaving villages outweigh its few variety of deficits. It’s value to say that individuals face some points, corresponding to being away from their prolonged household, extra aggressive and difficult job market, and considerably dearer residing value, once they transfer to the cities. Benefits like studying and exploring new experiences, getting a greater training resulting in a greater paid job and having an attention-grabbing profession, nevertheless, surpass the variety of the drawbacks of this improvement.

To conclude, there are numerous causes for younger technology to go away their houses to stay within the cities and this motion’s advantages simply outweigh its disadvantages.

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Job Response: 7

The query is answered and concepts are supported. The advantages have been mentioned in physique paragraph one – the drawbacks would should be given a bit extra dialogue within the second physique paragraph so as to obtain 8 or 9. As the query clearly signifies that there are drawbacks, these ought to be given satisfactory consideration. 

Coherence & Cohesion: 7

This IELTS band 7 essay pattern is well-organised with a mixture of transition alerts and a few good use of referencing and substitution. Barely too many transitions in preliminary place in physique paragraph one.

Lexical Useful resource: 7

There’s a good mixture of related matter associated vocabulary of fairly excessive stage and consciousness of collocation. Extra unusual phrases and phrases could be wanted for a band 8.

Grammatical Vary and Accuracy: 7

Good vary and mixture of complicated sentences and varieties, although some grammar errors are evident, notably within the latter a part of the essay.


Subject: Lack of Leisure Time (Band 7.5)

In some nations younger folks have little leisure time and are underneath a number of stress to work onerous on their research.

What do you suppose are the causes of this?

What options are you able to recommend?

There is no such thing as a doubt that having some leisure time throughout finding out reenergizes the mind to proceed working effectively. Nevertheless, college students in some nations are underneath excessive stress to check onerous and subsequently, they’ve minimal leisure time. The potential causes for this pattern in addition to instructed options might be mentioned in particulars.

One potential cause for college kids to face a number of stress to work onerous on their training with no day without work could be the excessive value of training. As an example, costly programs put a monetary burden on households and college students which forces the scholars to strive onerous to finish these programs efficiently and rapidly. In consequence, these college students ignore the necessity for some spare time and deal with their examine work. One other potential cause could be the quantity of examine supplies which is turning into intensive for a brief semester. Consequently, this stress leaves no selection for college kids besides to check as onerous as potential to have the ability to end this materials on time. Thus, it’s apparent that these college students don’t have any time left to have some leisure actions.

Nevertheless, some options may very well be instructed to assist remedy this downside. One potential answer could be lowering the price of instructional programs in these nations by authorities fundings. By doing this, each the scholars and their households would have much less monetary stress and subsequently the scholars may very well be much less confused throughout their research which could allow them to have some free time. One other answer could be examine teams, if college students examine in teams, then every one of many group members might summarize a part of the curriculum and shares it with the remainder of the group. This could save a number of time for all the college students within the group and because of this the quantity of stress could be lowered. These strategies might assist the scholars to have some leisure time which is vital for them to remain targeted.

In conclusion, there are various causes that put the scholars in some nations underneath stress and stress to check onerous and go away them no time for leisure actions, nevertheless, the above instructed options might deal with this downside and permit the scholars to have some examine free time which is important for them to recharge their vitality.

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Job Response: 8

It’s an excellent essay that’s clearly organised and solutions the query. It presents a well-developed response to the query with related, prolonged and supported concepts.

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

Concepts and knowledge are sequenced logically within the IELTS band 7 essay pattern; all facets of cohesion are well-managed; paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately. 

Lexical Useful resource: 7

Although there may be good use of vocabulary and only some errors, there may be not sufficient proof of skillfull use of unusual lexical objects to benefit an 8.

Grammatical Vary and Accuracy: 8

Makes use of a variety of buildings; nearly all of sentences are error-free; makes solely very occasional errors or inappropriacies.


Subject: Harmful Sports activities (Band 7)

Giant numbers of individuals take part in sports activities which might be extraordinarily harmful.

Why do you suppose folks do that?

How can the dangers of participation be minimised?

In the present day many video games are being performed all around the world. A few of them are extraordinarily dangerous and life threatening. Regardless of of those information their reputation is rising and many individuals are enjoying such video games on knowledgeable stage. This essay will determine the the reason why persons are enjoying such life threatening video games and supply some sensible approaches to attenuate the danger related to these video games.

To begin with we have to discover out the rationale why such harmful video games have gotten so well-liked. To start out with, the key attraction for gamers is nice cash that may very well be earned from a single sport in simply someday. The sort of fast cash will increase stimulation amongst many gamers to undertake video games corresponding to boxing, wrestling, bull driving and so on. Maybe, fame and recognition is one other compelling cause that encourages folks to decide on sure video games. Moreover, its confirmed that it’s human nature to just accept challenges and do issues in another way. Many gamers love to just accept challenges they usually wish to astonish the world by their distinctive expertise and expertise.

As these video games are actually being launched on the planet and many individuals are becoming a member of them it is very important scale back dangers by introducing some insurance policies and procedures. As an example, anybody who needs to take part particularly video games wouldn’t be allowed to play it till he/she deemed hundred per cent competence in required expertise and data. Secondly, it is very important endorse top quality private safety gear and coaching to fight threat related to video games.

In conclusion, glorious stage of insurance policies, procedures and coaching are integral a part of treating the dangers related to such video games.

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Job Response: 7

All elements of the duty are coated on this IELTS band 7 essay pattern, a transparent place is introduced. Some predominant concepts are a bit generalised and would should be extra particular to succeed in an 8.

Coherence & Cohesion: 7

Essay is logical with a transparent development. A spread of cohesive gadgets are used. Every paragraph has a transparent central thought. Some extra subtle cohesive gadgets could be wanted for an 8.

Lexical Useful resource: 7

Enough vary of vocab and a few much less frequent vocab used, however some errors in phrase selection / formation forestall a band 8.

Grammatical Vary and Accuracy: 7

The IELTS band 7 essay pattern total has excellent grammar, however there may be an error in fairly just a few of the sentences. Most are fairly minor however a few very noticeable and the candidates have to take care with this to keep away from a drop to a 6.


Subject: Studying & Writing Expertise (Band 7)

Some folks suppose that the rising use of computer systems and cellphones for communication has a unfavourable impact on younger folks’s studying and writing expertise.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It’s typically mentioned that the Web’s creation within the nineteenth made simpler the best way by which folks might study, work and examine. Using computer systems and cellphones was seen at first as a democratization of information, tradition, and books. Nevertheless, I believe that this major ideology was completely incorrect following the uncomfortable side effects and trajectory and use of those gadgets. Certainly. I do suppose that computer systems and cellphones for communication have a unfavourable impact on folks’s studying and writing expertise, particularly for younger folks. 

First, younger folks have been raised with mobiles and computer systems. The issue is that a lot of the content material shared on computer systems and cell telephones, particularly due to the usage of social, are movies, photos, and emoticons. For instance, to get knowledgeable of the information, folks used to speak with others, write letters to individuals who have been knowledgeable of the state of affairs, or learn newspapers earlier than the Web was created.  In the present day, most -if not all younger persons are being knowledgeable by watching movies on the Web and socials. In consequence, we are able to attest that younger persons are getting used to a digital world product of movies and photos. 

However not solely are newspapers involved, but additionally every kind of knowledge. Certainly, when younger folks, particularly college students, wanted to search out data for a college undertaking they have been confronted with what a number of younger persons are “reluctant to” as we speak: opening a guide, an encyclopedia. Certainly, many younger persons are being disinterested in books as computer systems and mobiles are making on-web analysis simpler and quicker. Younger persons are, because of this, studying much less and hoping to search out rapidly a bit of knowledge as an alternative of studying a whole article about it. For instance, who reads a whole guide a couple of nation to speak with somebody from one other nation once they can simply discover a quick article in regards to the tradition they’re making an attempt to know higher? 

Nonetheless, writing expertise are additionally strictly broken by computer systems and mobiles. As a result of we’re extra related to folks because of computer systems and mobiles, we enhance the method of speaking with everybody, in all places, the quickest as it may be. Earlier than, because of the usage of letters, folks had time to consider what they’d write and the way they want their textual content to be completely spelled and effectively written. Not solely letters but additionally telephone calls would assist folks develop their writing expertise as you can not use abbreviations and slang as folks do every single day by texting.  A single image-a yellow face referred to as a smiley- can substitute dozens of phrases if no more. Individuals are growing slang, picture, movies, and GIF language as an alternative of writing what they really feel, suppose, and wish to say in a textual content. 

Additionally,  vocal messages develop into a risk to studying and writing as these two expertise have gotten ineffective in computer systems and cell communication. As well as, making a expertise by means of which customers of those gadgets are enabled to dictate a sentence that the cell will write in a textual content makes folks much more unskilled in writing and studying. 

To conclude, the distinguished use of mobiles and computer systems for communication has quite a few unfavourable results on younger folks’s writing and studying expertise. Certainly, it retains them away from studying and particularly writing due to vocal messages and the creation of slang. Communication turns into a approach for folks to inform what they need to say with out occupied with what they’re writing and saying. 

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Job Response: 8

Typically an excellent reply with a lot of assist. I believe it might be higher with out this: 

“Additionally,  vocal messages develop into a risk to studying and writing as these two expertise have gotten ineffective in computer systems and cell communication. As well as, making a expertise by means of which customers of those gadgets are enabled to dictate a sentence that the cell will write in a textual content makes folks much more unskilled in writing and studying”. 

You do not clarify what you imply about vocal messages. It is probably not clear what the general predominant thought of this paragraph is.

Coherence & Cohesion: 6

It is a disgrace as this might have been an 8, however you’ve gotten this errors in physique para 3 – “Nonetheless”. That is a further unfavourable thought, not contrasting data. For 7 and up there will be over/underuse of CC however there should not be errors in use. An examiner would possibly maybe overlook it and provide you with 7.

Additionally as I mentioned that final physique paragraph shouldn’t be nice for CC.

Lexical Useful resource: 8

Principally excellent grammar however there are errors – an instance:

  • use of social – ought to be ‘social media’

Grammatical Vary and Accuracy: 7

Principally excellent grammar however there are errors – some examples:

  • newspapers involved – newspapers cannot be ‘involved’, unsure what you imply right here.
  • are being disinterested – ought to be “are disinterested”.
  • Certainly. I do (comma, not full cease)

Subject: Job Satisfaction (Band 7.5)

Contemplating that adults spend a lot of their lives at work, having job satisfaction is extraordinarily vital.

What elements contribute to job satisfaction?

How life like is the expectation of job satisfaction for all staff?

On this essay, I’ll state two predominant elements that contribute to job satisfaction, particularly success and adaptability, and discover potential the reason why job satisfaction, though definitely an goal for a lot of, can’t be achieved by all.

Although many firms promote their staff as happy and content material, it’s plain that this can’t at all times be the case. Few folks would consider a supervisor saying that their manufacturing unit employees are happy. I consider this has quite a bit to do with the elements that decide job satisfaction. As an example, normally, to ensure that somebody to be happy at their job there have to be one thing for them to achieve, be it a private or shared objective. The manufacturing unit instance works completely: folks working in a manufacturing unit hardly discover a objective in what they’re doing completely different to producing a secure month-to-month revenue.

Flexibility is a second component to be considered. What is supposed by this isn’t versatile working hours, although these can definitely assist too, however relatively an opportunity to do and work on completely different duties or tasks and possibly even a chance to scale them. This enables for a use of various expertise, or an area to study them, and fixed new stimuli. Sadly, many roles don’t supply this type of alternative, leading to repetitive and compelled labour and energy.

In conclusion, there are various concepts to be developed when speaking about elements influencing job satisfaction, corresponding to flexibility and success, and if some jobs supply each, the overwhelming majority provides neither, which makes it inconceivable for each worker to expertise satisfaction at their jobs.

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Job Response: 7

Almost an 8 however I believe a bit extra element and clarification may very well be given to among the concepts and maybe just a few extra concepts of assist. As an example extra may very well be defined about why or what jobs don’t have flexibility. A band 8 or 9 additionally is probably going to have the ability to write a bit extra.

Coherence & Cohesion: 8

It’s effectively organised and all facets of cohesion are managed effectively.

Lexical Useful resource: 8

Typically excellent use of vocabulary with few errors.

Grammatical Vary and Accuracy: 7

You could have good grammar right here however I believe in sure locations it might present a bit extra sophistication/complexity. As an example, I confirmed you above the place a fancy pronoun could be higher as with out this the sentences look a bit uneven and quick. And this sentence sound a bit awkward with two ‘ands’: “leading to repetitive and compelled labour and energy.”


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